STA 2018 KS1 Expected Standard
Piece F — Persuasion
Year 2 · STA Expected Standard · Kim
Published exemplification — the same live marking as the product, on government or exam-board material, not a pupil’s book. STA KS1 English writing exemplification. Contains material developed by the Standards and Testing Agency for 2018 national curriculum assessments and licenced under Open Government Licence v3.0.
Published script
Live marked report
Working at the expected standard
This is a lively, purposeful missing-dragon notice, and it sits very close to the STA's Year 2 expected-standard information exemplar, which the STA describes as 'particularly accomplished' and notes for its 'opening line and the precise details about the dragon' . The writing is clear, engaging and age-appropriate, with a strong sense of purpose for the reader.
Strengths
You give the dragon vivid, specific details such as 'a silver tummy, blax body and black feet' and 'Its claws are silver'.
Your warning language is strong and purposeful: 'Please report', 'Whatever you do do not shoot it!' and 'you will be locked in jail for three years!'
The piece is easy to follow overall and the reader can quickly understand the message of the poster.
Areas for Development
Some sentences need tighter punctuation and capital letter control, for example 'Last Seen flying out of forest schoo on monday night.'
A few common words are not yet secure in spelling, such as 'schoo', 'blax', 'reporte' and 'tobeseen'.
Some sentence boundaries are blurred, so rereading would help you decide where each thought ends.
Next Steps
Practise writing one idea per sentence in a short information poster, then check each sentence for a full stop or exclamation mark.
Composition
| Can-statement | Status | Evidence |
|---|---|---|
| write for different purposes | Met | The piece works as a missing-dragon notice with a clear purpose for the reader. |
| encapsulate what they want to say, sentence by sentence | Partially met | The main message is clear, but some ideas run together, for example 'Last Seen flying out of forest schoo on monday night.' |
Vocabulary
| Can-statement | Status | Evidence |
|---|---|---|
| use expanded noun phrases to describe and specify | Met | The dragon is described with specific detail: 'a silver tummy, blax body and black feet' and 'Its claws are silver'. |
| choose vocabulary for effect and clarity | Met | Words and phrases such as 'Please report', 'do not shoot it!' and 'Rewarded £900' make the poster lively and purposeful. |
grammar and punctuation
| Can-statement | Status | Evidence |
|---|---|---|
| use sentences with different forms: statement, command and exclamation | Met | There are statements, commands and exclamations, for example 'It Will breath fire at you and eat you up!' and 'Whatever you do do not shoot it!'. |
| use subordination and coordination | Partially met | Some subordination is shown in 'If Seen then Please report' and some coordination in 'If Seen and not reported', but control is uneven. |
| demarcate sentences with capital letters and full stops | Partially met | Capital letters and sentence boundaries are attempted, but not consistently controlled across the piece. |
Spelling
| Can-statement | Status | Evidence |
|---|---|---|
| segment spoken words into phonemes and represent these by graphemes, spelling some words correctly and making phonically-plausible attempts at others | Met | The spelling shows clear phonetic attempts such as 'schoo', 'blax', 'reporte' and 'tobeseen'. |
| spell some common exception words | Partially met | Some common words are correct, for example 'Please' and 'you', but exception-word spelling is not yet secure across the piece. |
Handwriting
| Can-statement | Status | Evidence |
|---|---|---|
| Handwriting (assessed from the original work) | Met | Large mixed-print handwriting with uneven letter sizes and spacing. |
Grammar, Punctuation & Spelling security assessment
Vocabulary
“a silver tummy, blax body and black feet”
“Its claws are silver”
Specific descriptive detail is used to identify the dragon.
Sentence Structure
“Missing one dragon”
“Whatever you do do not shoot it!”
“If Seen then Please report on: 089 3016 1300 999013.”
The piece uses short, purposeful units of meaning and direct reader address.
Punctuation
“Last Seen flying out of forest schoo on monday night.”
“It Will breath fire at you and eat you up!”
“Whatever you do do not shoot it!”
Sentence demarcation is attempted, with some exclamation marks used for effect.
Spelling
“schoo”
“blax”
“reporte”
“tobeseen”
Several less familiar words are represented with plausible phonetic spelling.
“Please”
“you”
“Whatever”
Some high-frequency words are secure, but exception-word spelling is not yet consistent.
The original writing, exactly as written, with the teacher notes marked
Piece F: Information
Missing one dragon Teacher note: Your heading makes clear this is a missing-dragon notice.
Last Seen flying out of forest schoo on monday night. Teacher note: Use a capital letter for Monday. He has a silver tummy, blax body and black feet. Teacher note: These details help the reader picture the dragon. It Will breath fire at you and eat you up! Teacher note: Keep 'will' lowercase because it is not a new sentence. If Seen then Teacher note: Use capital letters only at the start of sentences. Please report Teacher note: This command tells the reader exactly what to do. on: 089 3016 1300 999013. If Seen and not reported you Will be locked in jail for three years! You will be Rewarded £900 or 309306 bucks if yo reporte. Teacher note: Recheck common words so readers understand your message. Whatever you do do not shoot it! Teacher note: Your strong command gives the reader an important warning. Its claws are silver so it is easy tobeseen. Teacher note: You use 'so' to link your ideas clearly. Teacher note: ILLEGIBLE class3 year2.
The improved version — read it straight through, then see what changed
Last seen flying out of Forest on Monday night. body and black feet; its claws are silver, so it is easy It will fire at you and eat you up!
If seen, on: 089 3016 1300 999013. If seen and not reported, you will be locked in jail for three years! You will be rewarded £900 or
What changed and why
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