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STA 2018 KS1 Expected Standard
Piece F — Persuasion
Year 2 · STA Expected Standard · Kim
Published exemplification — the same live marking as the product, on government or exam-board material, not a pupil’s book. STA KS1 English writing exemplification. Contains material developed by the Standards and Testing Agency for 2018 national curriculum assessments and licenced under Open Government Licence v3.0.
Published script
Live marked report
Marked against: STA · primary · English writing
KS1 Writing Assessment
EXS
Working at the Expected Standard
This is a strong Year 2 persuasive/information piece with a clear purpose and a lively, reader-focused tone. It sits comfortably at the expected standard and is very close to the STA’s information example in Kim’s collection, where the official commentary notes the dragon poster is ‘particularly accomplished’ and uses precise detail about the missing dragon .
Strengths
You present the dragon clearly with precise detail: ‘a silver tummy, blue body and black feet’.
Your warning language is effective and engaging, for example ‘please report’ and ‘Whatever you do do not shoot it!’
You use exclamation marks well to create urgency, such as ‘eat you up!’ and ‘three years!’.
Areas for Development
Check the spelling and spacing of common words and names, for example ‘mondaynight’ could be ‘Monday night’.
Tighten sentence control by adding a final proofread for places where one idea moves into the next.
Try to proof-read the piece once more so words like ‘breath’ are accurate when you mean ‘breathe’.
Next Steps
1
Read the piece back aloud and underline any word that looks unfinished or stuck together, then correct it.
MetPartially metNot met
Composition
| Can-statement | Status | Evidence |
|---|---|---|
| write effectively and coherently for different purposes, drawing on their reading to inform the vocabulary and grammar of their writing | Met | The piece works clearly as a missing-dragon poster, with a strong purpose and audience in ‘Missing one dragon’ and ‘please report’. The warning/reward format is sustained throughout, echoing the successful missing-poster style seen in Kim’s EXS exemplar . |
| make simple additions, revisions and proof-reading corrections to their own writing | Not met | Only the final OCR text is available, so there is no visible evidence of editing or revision in this sample. |
Vocabulary
| Can-statement | Status | Evidence |
|---|---|---|
| choose words that create a clear effect for the reader | Met | Words and phrases such as ‘Missing one dragon’, ‘please report’, ‘locked in jail’ and ‘rewarded €900’ make the notice feel urgent and convincing. |
Grammar and punctuation
| Can-statement | Status | Evidence |
|---|---|---|
| demarcate most sentences in their writing with capital letters and full stops, and use question marks correctly when required | Partially met | Most sentence boundaries are clear, with capitals, full stops and exclamation marks used across the piece, for example ‘Last seen flying out of forest school on mondaynight.’ and ‘eat you up!’. |
| use co-ordination (such as or/and/but) and some subordination (such as when/if/that/because) to join clauses | Partially met | Co-ordination appears in ‘He has a silver tummy, blue body and black feet’ and ‘If seen and not reported…’. Subordination is present in ‘If seen then please report…’. |
| use present and past tense mostly correctly and consistently | Partially met | The writing keeps a consistent warning/report style, with future form used appropriately in ‘It will breath fire at you’ and ‘you will be locked in jail’. |
Spelling
| Can-statement | Status | Evidence |
|---|---|---|
| segment spoken words into phonemes and represent these by graphemes, spelling many of these words correctly and making phonically plausible attempts at others | Partially met | Most words are accurate, while plausible attempts such as ‘mondaynight’ and ‘breath’ show phonetic awareness. |
| spell many common exception words | Partially met | Common words such as ‘you’, ‘will’, ‘please’ and ‘report’ are secure, though there are still some insecure spellings in the piece. |
Handwriting
| Can-statement | Status | Evidence |
|---|---|---|
| Handwriting (assessed from the original work) | Met | Neat letters with some uneven spacing and size. |
Grammar, Punctuation & Spelling security assessment
Sentence structure
Short, clear sentences and linked ideas
Mostly secure
“Missing one dragon”
“Last seen flying out of forest school on mondaynight.”
“Whatever you do do not shoot it!”
The piece is sequenced clearly and keeps the reader focused on the missing-dragon message.
Punctuation
Capital letters, full stops and exclamation marks
Mostly secure
“Last seen flying out of forest school on mondaynight.”
“It will breath fire at you and eat you up!”
“You will be rewarded €900 or 309306 bucks if you report.”
Sentence demarcation is mostly secure, with exclamation marks used for emphasis.
Grammar
Coordination and simple subordination
Mostly secure
“He has a silver tummy, blue body and black feet.”
“If seen then please report at 069 3046 1300 999 013.”
“If seen and not reported you will be locked in jail for three years!”
The writing uses coordination well and includes an if-clause to add urgency.
Spelling
Phonically plausible attempts and secure common spellings
Mostly secure
“mondaynight”
“breath”
“claws”
“report”
Most spellings are correct; the few insecure spellings are phonically plausible for Year 2.
Student's original text with teacher annotations highlighted
Missing one dragon
Last seen flying out of forest school on mondaynight. He has a silver tummy, blue body and black feet. It will breath fire at you and eat you up! If seen then please report at 069 3046 1300 999 013. If seen and not reported you will be locked in jail for three years! You will be rewarded €900 or 309306 bucks if you report. Whatever you do do not shoot it! Its claws are silver so it is easy to be seen. Name Redacted class 3 year 2.