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STA 2018 KS1 Expected Standard
Piece E — Description
Year 2 · STA Expected Standard · Kim
Published exemplification — the same live marking as the product, on government or exam-board material, not a pupil’s book. STA KS1 English writing exemplification. Contains material developed by the Standards and Testing Agency for 2018 national curriculum assessments and licenced under Open Government Licence v3.0.
Published script
Live marked report
Marked against: STA · primary · English Writing
KS1 Writing Assessment
EXS
Working at the Expected Standard
This is a lively and well-focused description of a dragon. It is clearly at the expected standard: the ideas are sequenced sensibly, the writing stays on one subject, and there is some strong imaginative language, with a few features edging towards greater depth. The piece also compares well with the KS1 exemplification for description writing, which shows that coherent sequencing, descriptive detail and mostly secure punctuation are enough for EXS .
Strengths
You keep the description focused on the dragon all the way through, adding one interesting detail after another.
Your vocabulary is vivid and imaginative, for example 'rings of fire', 'the center of the sun' and 'turn any thing into food'.
You use a range of sentence openings and structures, including 'When...' and 'If you make him angry...'.
Your punctuation is mostly secure, with full stops, capital letters and an exclamation mark helping the meaning.
Areas for Development
A few tricky words still need securing, such as 'breth', 'sissel', 'dinamite' and 'flys'.
You could check sentence openings carefully so every sentence starts with a capital letter.
There is room to make the description even more controlled by varying the sentence patterns a little more.
Some handwriting features cannot be judged from OCR alone, so the full presentation of the piece would need to be checked separately.
Next Steps
1
Read each sentence aloud and check that it starts with a capital letter and ends with the right punctuation.
2
Choose one tricky word in each sentence to spell carefully, then compare it with the correct spelling.
3
Try adding one more sentence with a different opener, such as a fronted describing phrase.
MetPartially metNot met
Composition
| Can-statement | Status | Evidence |
|---|---|---|
| Writes a clear, coherent piece that stays focused on one purpose | Met | The whole piece stays on the dragon description, with each sentence adding a new detail about what it looks like, does and where it lives. |
| Sequences ideas logically | Met | The writing moves from what the dragon is, to what its breath does, to how it flies, sleeps and reacts when angry. |
| Makes simple revisions or proof-reading corrections | Partially met | The transcript shows visible correction marks, suggesting the writer has checked and adjusted parts of the piece. |
Vocabulary
| Can-statement | Status | Evidence |
|---|---|---|
| Uses descriptive and imaginative vocabulary | Met | Phrases such as 'fire dragon', 'rings of fire', 'lights up the sky like the sun' and 'turn things to stone' create a vivid image. |
| Uses words to specify and add detail | Met | Details like 'the center of the sun' and 'any thing into food' make the description more precise and interesting. |
| Draws on a richer vocabulary for effect | Partially met | The writing includes powerful, imaginative choices such as 'dinamite' and 'catch fire', which give the piece energy and impact. |
Grammar and punctuation
| Can-statement | Status | Evidence |
|---|---|---|
| Uses capital letters and full stops mostly correctly | Partially met | Most sentences are demarcated clearly, for example 'My dragon is a fire dragon.' and 'He can also turn any thing into food.' |
| Uses subordination and co-ordination | Met | There is subordination in 'If you make him angry, he will...' and 'When he flys...', alongside coordination in 'He can turn things to stone, make people catch fire and make things explode.' |
| Uses a range of sentence forms | Met | The piece includes statements, conditional sentences and an exclamation at the end: 'He will throw you in the sun!' |
Spelling
| Can-statement | Status | Evidence |
|---|---|---|
| Segments spoken words into phonemes and represents these by graphemes | Partially met | Attempts such as 'breth', 'sissel', 'dinamite', 'flys' and 'gose' are phonically plausible and show sound-based spelling. |
| Spells many common exception words correctly | Partially met | Common words such as 'my', 'is', 'his', 'he', 'if', 'you', 'when', 'the', 'can' and 'also' are spelled correctly. |
| Attempts unfamiliar words with growing control | Partially met | The spelling choices show the writer is testing out more ambitious words, even when they are not yet fully conventional. |
Handwriting
| Can-statement | Status | Evidence |
|---|---|---|
| Handwriting (assessed from the original work) | Met | Neat letters with some inconsistent spacing and size. |
Grammar, Punctuation & Spelling security assessment
Sentence structure
Sequenced sentences and cohesion
Mostly secure
“My dragon is a fire dragon.”
“He lives in the center of the sun.”
“When he gets angry he will throw you in the sun!”
The piece stays on one topic and develops the description sentence by sentence.
Subordination and coordination
Secure
“If you make him angry, he will breath rings of fire at you.”
“When he flys, he lights up the sky like the sun.”
“He can turn things to stone, make people catch fire and make things explode.”
Both subordinating and coordinating structures are present.
Punctuation
Capital letters and full stops
Mostly secure
“My dragon is a fire dragon.”
“He can also turn any thing into food.”
“He will throw you in the sun!”
Sentence demarcation is mostly clear, with one exclamation mark used for emphasis.
Spelling
Phonically plausible spellings
Secure
“breth”
“sissel”
“dinamite”
“flys”
“gose”
The spellings show sound-based attempts at unfamiliar words.
Common exception words
Secure
“my”
“is”
“his”
“he”
“you”
“when”
“the”
“can”
“also”
A good number of common words are spelled correctly.
Handwriting
Spacing between words
Mostly secure
“My dragon is a fire dragon.”
“He can also turn any thing into food.”
Spacing is visible and generally consistent in the transcript.