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Piece A — Explanation

Year 2 · STA Expected Standard · Kim

Published exemplification — the same live marking as the product, on government or exam-board material, not a pupil’s book. STA KS1 English writing exemplification. Contains material developed by the Standards and Testing Agency for 2018 national curriculum assessments and licenced under Open Government Licence v3.0.

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Marked against: STA · primary · English writing

KS1 Writing Assessment

EXS

Working at the Expected Standard

This is a clear and purposeful explanation of a funny imagined machine, and the reader can follow the sequence of steps. It sits broadly at the expected standard because you organise the ideas logically and make several good attempts at sentence control and spelling.

Strengths

You sequence the ideas clearly: 'You plug in the machine... Then Switch on the TV box' helps the reader follow the process.

You use lots of purposeful, imaginative details such as 'bleep, bu22, bleep' and 'Moltey tost machine' to create a clear explanation.

You show signs of checking and improving your writing, for example the crossed-out words and corrections.

Areas for Development

Some capital letters are inconsistent, for example 'Thang', 'Befare' and 'Switch'.

Several words are still spelt phonetically rather than correctly, such as 'Moltey', 'tost', 'buton' and 'pluged'.

A few sentences could be made even clearer by using a wider range of joining words and keeping punctuation consistent.

Next Steps

Write a short explanation in 3 or 4 steps, then read it back and check that each sentence starts with a capital letter and ends with a full stop or exclamation mark.

MetPartially metNot met

Composition

Can-statement	Status	Evidence
write simple, coherent narratives about personal experiences and those of others (real or fictional)	Not met	This piece is an explanation, not a narrative.
write about real events, recording these simply and clearly	Partially met	The steps are clear and easy to follow: 'You plug in the machine' ... 'Then Switch on the TV box'.

Vocabulary

Can-statement	Status	Evidence
choose vocabulary for meaning and effect	Met	Words such as 'bleep', 'TV box' and 'Moltey tost machine' create a clear invented machine idea.
use vocabulary appropriate to the purpose	Met	The language fits an explanatory/instructional style: 'Make sure you have pluged everything in properly'.

Grammar and punctuation

Can-statement	Status	Evidence
demarcate most sentences with capital letters and full stops, and use exclamation marks when required	Partially met	Most sentences are clearly separated, but capitals are inconsistent, for example 'Thang', 'Befare' and 'Switch'.
use co-ordination and some subordination to join clauses	Partially met	There is some joining of ideas in 'and then' and 'so you can'.
use present and past tense mostly correctly and consistently	Partially met	The piece is mainly in present/imperative form, with no strong evidence of consistent tense control.

Spelling

Can-statement	Status	Evidence
segment spoken words into phonemes and represent these by graphemes, spelling some words correctly and making phonetically plausible attempts at others	Partially met	Attempts such as 'Moltey', 'tost', 'buton', 'wach' and 'hapening' are phonetically plausible.
spell many common exception words	Partially met	Some common words are correct, including 'you', 'the', 'make' and 'then', but several other words are not yet secure.

Can-statement	Status	Evidence

Can-statement	Status	Evidence

Handwriting

Can-statement	Status	Evidence
Handwriting (assessed from the original work)	Met	Irregular letter sizes with inconsistent spacing.