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STA 2018 KS2 Expected Standard
Piece B — Non-chronological report
Year 6 · STA Expected Standard · Leigh
Published exemplification — the same live marking as the product, on government or exam-board material, not a pupil’s book. STA KS2 English writing exemplification. Contains material developed by the Standards and Testing Agency for 2018 national curriculum assessments and licenced under Open Government Licence v3.0.
Published script
Live marked report
Marked against: STA · primary · English Writing
KS2 Writing Assessment
EXS
Working at the Expected Standard
You have written a clear and engaging instruction text with a strong sense of purpose. The reader is guided through the process step by step, and your opening immediately involves them with direct address.
Strengths
You use headings and numbered steps effectively, for example "Equipment:" and "Method:" plus the sequence from 1 to 10.
You keep the reader in mind with direct address and questions such as "Do you have a Pharaoh ready to be mummified?"
You include relevant topic vocabulary such as "Canopic jars", "Natron" and "amulets", which suits the subject well.
Your sequence is clear and easy to follow, with connectives like "Following this", "After that", "Next" and "Finally".
Areas for Development
A few sentences are awkward or slightly confusing, so the instructions could be made even smoother and more precise.
Some punctuation is secure, but you could control parenthesis and sentence boundaries more carefully in a few places.
There are a few spelling and word-choice slips in longer or more technical words, especially where you are writing quickly.
The ending could sound a little more polished and formal for an instruction text.
Next Steps
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Re-read one paragraph and edit any sentence that sounds clumsy or repetitive, keeping the same ideas but making it flow better.
MetPartially metNot met
Composition
| Can-statement | Status | Evidence |
|---|---|---|
| Write for a range of purposes | Met | This is a clear instruction text: "How to mummify a Pharaoh" with a step-by-step method and a concluding sentence. |
| Use paragraphs or other organisational devices to organise ideas | Met | The text is organised with "Equipment:" and "Method:" plus numbered steps from 1 to 10. |
| In non-narrative writing, use simple devices to structure the writing and support the reader | Met | Headings, bullet points, numbering and time connectives such as "Next" and "Finally" support the reader well. |
Vocabulary
| Can-statement | Status | Evidence |
|---|---|---|
| Select language that shows good awareness of the reader | Met | Direct address and questions engage the reader: "Do you have a Pharaoh ready to be mummified?" |
| Select vocabulary and grammatical structures that reflect what the writing requires, doing this mostly appropriately | Met | The writing uses instruction-like language and sequencing, for example "Carefully place the body" and "Finally, place the mummy in a coffin". |
| Use a range of devices to build cohesion within and across paragraphs | Partially met | Cohesion is supported by sequencing words such as "Following this" and "After that", though some steps are more stand-alone than others. |
Grammar and punctuation
| Can-statement | Status | Evidence |
|---|---|---|
| Use capital letters, full stops, question marks, commas for lists and apostrophes for contraction mostly correctly | Met | Question mark in "mummified?" and list punctuation in "Canopic jars, 150m of linen, Natron salt" are handled mostly well. |
| Use the range of punctuation taught at KS2 mostly correctly | Met | There is evidence of colons, brackets and commas, for example "Equipment:" and "(or different types of spices)". |
| Use sentence structures and clause combinations accurately enough to support meaning | Met | Most instructions are clear and grammatically controlled, though a few sentences are clumsy, such as "This can take up to around 70 days depending on the shape or size of the body." |
Spelling
| Can-statement | Status | Evidence |
|---|---|---|
| Spell correctly most words from the Year 5 / Year 6 spelling list | Partially met | Many subject-specific and ambitious words are accurate, including "thoroughly", "instructions", "severe" and "protected". |
| Spell common and topic vocabulary accurately enough to avoid meaning being lost | Partially met | Technical vocabulary is generally successful, for example "Canopic", "Natron", "amulets" and "pharaoh". |
Handwriting
| Can-statement | Status | Evidence |
|---|---|---|
| Handwriting (assessed from the original work) | Met | Neat and well-formed letters with consistent spacing.; Neat letters with some uneven spacing and size. |
Grammar, Punctuation & Spelling security assessment
Sentence Structure
Direct address and rhetorical question
Secure
“Do you have a Pharaoh ready to be mummified?”
“Are you looking for a simple method for mummifying your pharaoh?”
The opening addresses the reader directly and establishes purpose immediately.
Sequencing and time connectives
Secure
“Following this,”
“After that”
“Now”
“Next”
“Finally”
The method is signposted clearly from one step to the next.
Punctuation
Headings, colons and bullet points
Secure
“Equipment:”
“Method:”
“- Canopic jars”
“- Natron salt”
Presentational devices support the instructional layout.
Brackets and parenthetical detail
Mostly secure
“(or different types of spices)”
“(which is a kind of salt)”
“(Also place an onion in the right hand of the pharaoh)”
Additional information is added in brackets several times.
Commas and apostrophes
Mostly secure
“making sure that the Canopic jars don't drop”
“lungs, liver and stomach”
“Then follow these simple steps”
Lists and contractions are generally punctuated correctly.
Vocabulary
Topic vocabulary and reader awareness
Secure
“Canopic jars”
“Natron salt”
“amulets”
“Pharaoh”
Relevant subject vocabulary is chosen to suit the task.
Spelling
Mostly accurate spelling of common and topic words
Mostly secure
“thoroughly”
“valuable”
“protected”
“scrolls”
Most everyday and topic words are spelled correctly, with a few weaker attempts in longer or more technical words.
Student's original text with teacher annotations highlighted
How to mummify a Pharaoh clear title and purpose
Do you have a Pharaoh ready to be mummified? direct address Are you looking for a simple method for mummifying your pharaoh? reader awareness Then follow these simple steps to help the emperor! clear instruction
Equipment: heading - Canopic jars - 150m of linen - Sawdust (or different types of spices) extra detail - Natron salt - Resin - Onion - Amulets - Scrolls - Hook
Method: heading 1) Before starting, collect all of the utensils, making sure that the Canopic jars don't drop. 2) Carefully place the body on a sacred table and with a hook, gently remove the brain through the nose.
3) Following this, thoroughly wash the body and remove the internal organs.
4) Having finished the last step, place the lungs, liver and stomach into canopic jars.
5) After that take out the heart so that it can be sealed with a scarab.
6) Now dry the body in natron.
7) When completed, dry the body in salt, then fill the body with spices, sawdust and linen.
8) Next, bandage up the Pharaoh with strips of linen.
9) After this, wrap amulets and scrolls inside the strips, so that the dead Pharaoh is protected.
10) Finally, place the mummy in a coffin painted with a face to resemble the person inside and process the coffin to the grave.